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Posted on: Oct 15 2012, 06:04 PM


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QUOTE(Viceman B. @ Oct 15 2012, 12:24 PM) *
Request for Fourth. ^^

Rayner
- The Wolfpack Rescue (completed)
- Aversion to Adversity (completed)

Nerine
- Fruit of the Hunt (uncompleted)
- A Simple Escort Mission

Octavia
- Rescue The Lady Wench (uncompleted)
- Turning Over Uneven Rocks (uncompleted)

Go for it.
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Posted on: Oct 13 2012, 07:10 PM


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"Of course I knew she was dead, ma'am," Constance added. "I've only just been transferred as well; I don't know the officers as well as I'd like. Sergeant Connie, ma'am. No last name." Perhaps she didn't have Eiza's acting skills, but Constance could play the part of an honest soldier intimidated by a superior easy enough -- she'd been there herself. Well, perhaps the honest part was debatable, but the principle was the same.

Quell looked at them for another long, hard moment. Then she let out a hard huff. "Why on earth did I have to join the military?" she muttered. "One would almost think I enjoy being surrounded by morons and incompetents." And she didn't incinerate them on the spot. Instead, she turned back around and all but stormed away at a less leisurely pace, still muttering, but this time her words were an unintelligible muddle of resentment.

Connie let another 10 minutes go by, before casually holding her hand up in a gesture that they had established a meaning for beforehand: 'on my signal.' In the next few minutes, either they would all be famous for killing one of the most powerful mages in the world, or they would all be dead.
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Posted on: Oct 12 2012, 10:45 PM


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Constance caught the bottle. Just barely, though -- the sharp pain that lanced through her side didn't do wonders for her coordination. Dammit. This wound could very well be the end of her. But there wasn't time to see a healer about it. "I can't tend to this with the arrow in," she said. "Thank you, though." Tucking the medicine into a pouch, she froze and swore as she saw what was galloping toward them.

"Oh, for..." This was not good news at this stage. "I'd love to stay and chat, but we've got to scatter! An archer can only aim at one of us at a time!" With that, she pulled her mount into a sharp dive, the motion of which sent yet another spike of pain through her side. As if on cue, an arrow whistled through the air, directly where she'd been hanging moments before.

"Look alive! We have company!" she heard herself saying to the nearby cavalry units. "You! Gather up some riders and flank them -- if we keep them at a distance, we're dead." The world was beginning to have a vaguely fuzzy edge to it, though. Blood loss, probably. If she let this wound go about its own business for too long, she wouldn't be living to regret it.
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Posted on: Sep 21 2012, 08:03 AM


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QUOTE(Grandmaster @ Sep 19 2012, 04:14 AM) *
Strength and Valor
RP type: Epic
Status: Discontinued
Summary: My first attempt at a roleplay in which a Lycian noble, forgotten from the war against Bern, attempted to rebel against the Lycia league. It failed when one person stopped posting all together and the other lost interest. My interest in putting the topic up for grading is to maybe get the other members some points while I plan for a full reboot of my character and my roleplay.
Cast:
Cedric Armstrong 20/1 Hero [Swords {0/5 B}, Axes {0/4 D}
Rolfen 1 Bard {Rings {E 0/5}]
Ann Darkweave 7 Shaman [Dark {D 3/5}]
Etain 20/1 Sniper [Bows {C 3/5}]
Tristan of the Hidden Gorge 18 Mage [Anima {B}]

I'll take this one.
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Posted on: Sep 16 2012, 11:19 PM


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Let's be honest here -- very little happened in this topic. You met, had obligatory combat nonsense, then had just decided on a course of action between yourselves when you packed it in. This was basically a half done affair, so we've got loose ends and no form of closure. Which is always unfortuante, but I'll do my best to give you commentary nonetheless.

Crowley
Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+1)
Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
Character's interactions were meaningful and interesting, allowed the reader to understand things about the character (+1)
Roleplay thread was terminated before completion or character dropped partway through (-2)
3 points = 2 levels, two fifths of a sword level.

You seem to really like playing grumpy characters -- I really get a Themis 2.0 vibe from Crowley a lot of the time, even if his motivations are somewhat different. He's a big part of the reason I feel like this group would have probably exploded if they had stayed together for too long without the distraction of combat to keep them from bickering -- which is definitely not a bad thing. He's a character who can make a lot of situations a lot more interesting, and you're very good at making his unpleasant personality come across. However, the comical, exaggerated sexism really makes him ring hollow. How does it make sense to be surprised at seeing a feminine looking female pegasus knight in a setting like Elibe, where Ilia's famous pegasus knights are well known to basically be exclusively female? Not to mention the number of female leaders and such -- it just does not feel like it gels with the setting.

Tara
Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+1)
Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
Character's interactions were meaningful and interesting, allowed the reader to understand things about the character (+1)
Roleplay thread was terminated before completion or character dropped partway through (-2)
3 points = 2 levels, two fifths of a sword level.

Poor Tara. Stuck with people who simultaneously wanted to fanboy out at her and, in Crowley's case, find excuses not to take her seriously. I feel like she might have been better off not announcing her actual affiliation straight off. Between her, Crowley and Valsford, there were a lot of big egos bouncing around here, and I'm really surprised that nothing more came of it. The idea of this level 10 pegasus knight trying to restart the Fang is interesting -- I hope you do more with it in the future.

Valerie
Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+1)
Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
Roleplay thread was terminated before completion or character dropped partway through (-2)
2 points = 1 levels, two fifths of an axe level

Having a character around to be a foil to all of these would-be vigilantes was probably a good thing, although Valerie did take being forced to work with a criminal assassin and a couple Black Fang fanboys pretty well. It was also cool how she was the only one to take a humbler, probably more realistic stance to her own abilities -- possibly because she wasn't trying to come across as a deadly, mysterious assassin type or impress a new employer. I wish you'd stuck around longer than you did.

Valsford
Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+0)
Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
Roleplay thread was terminated before completion or character dropped partway through (-2)
1 points + 1 level thread running bonus = 2 levels, two fifths of a Lance level

The premise of a new group using the Black Fang's name without upholding their morals is an interesting one, but I feel like using it for a band of generic town raiding bandits was almost a waste -- their motivations for using the name in the first place were also kind of a let down. It wasn't terrible, just unremarkable and maybe a little played out.
Valsford himself was a decent character most of the time. He seemed pretty full of himself, which can always lead to fun interactions when you've got other similarly big egos around.But, dude -- making an NPC suddenly exhibit sexism just so you can have your character tell them off for it and look like a Good Guy comes across as a little sleezy. At least give the other player a chance to actually respond to this situation you're pushing onto their character before you jump all over it like that.
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Posted on: Sep 12 2012, 01:14 AM


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It took another 10 minutes before they found what they were looking for. Ahead was a steep incline: Atop it, a man kicked and threw rocks down at a large, armoured women struggling to climb up behind him. Well, there was Banehallow, and there was their wyvern rider. They were quickly running out of mountain road -- there wasn't a great deal higher to go on the modest peak.

"I think that might be them," Tangle said, unnecessarily, right around the same time that the woman seemed to pick up on their presence.

She didn't look a thing like her sister; large, muscular, and features that hinted more at Bern descent than Sacaen. But as she saw them, and put two to two together, Tangle could almost see the fury blaze to life in her eyes. "Jyn?" she asked. Her hand gripped the handle of the throwing axe she held, so tight that the wooden haft seemed in danger of splitting in two. "Where is my sister?" she demanded, taking a step forward. Then a rock cracked her full in the face, sending her toppling to the side.

Apparently, taking their eyes off of Banehallow would be a bad mistake.
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Posted on: Sep 12 2012, 12:12 AM


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The Mage General led them on a meandering, but purposeful route, striking away from the camp. Just a little further, and they would be sure of privacy. Connie's heart was pounding away intensely in her chest the whole way. This was possibly more nerve-racking than just about anything she'd done in recent memory. It was all she could do to keep from ruining the whole plan by trying to take Quell's head off right then and there. Only the memory of the charred bones they'd seen before kept her from doing it.

"You're new," the general said suddenly, without turning around. Constance kept her face schooled, but inside she had to remind herself to keep breathing. "You, the tall one," Quell continued. Which meant Kenth, almost certainly. "I might not have time to memorise every little name I come across, but I'd have remembered at least seeing someone built like a shaved ox in your unit." She glanced over her shoulder, giving him a disapproving look. "They've not even managed to find you a uniform that fits. Typical! I've told Culbert before, in no uncertain terms: No more inexperienced slobs." She threw her hands up in exasperation. "Sergeant, be sure to tell him when you report back, that I want to have a private word before the day is out."

"Yes, ma'am," Constance said. That had nearly been bad.

All at once, Quell stopped, slowly turning to face them. "Lieutenant Culbert is dead -- a rebel arrow caught her through the throat not two weeks ago. And she was a woman. One would think you would have noticed when your officer changes so suddenly." Constance felt a wave of heat radiate out from the little woman -- the air in front of her practically shimmered with it. "Unless you expect me to believe that all three of you are that green." She narrowed her eyes. "So, tell me: who are you?"
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Posted on: Sep 10 2012, 09:30 PM


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Nerine wasn't dead; that was good. She would have felt bad if the girl had bit it so early in her career -- she'd seen quite enough of that in her time as it was. Constance didn't stick around, though; she needed to take her own advise and stay mobile. She gave a grin and a wave Nerine, before swooping up away. The battle was going well, she sensed -- the Sacaens had lost in the first few minutes, when they had failed to mount an organised resistence. She even thought she could see a wyvern rampaging in the distance, meaning that the Lady was probably still alive to pay them.

This was no time to relax, though, as a sudden, agonising pain in her side reminded her. She let out a startled gasp, biting back the louder and less dignified scream that had almost slipped out. A long, black shaft had punched through her armour, sending icy cold jolts of pain everytime she moved. Or breathed, for that matter. There was no telling how bad it was until she could get to a medic. She pulled her pegasus up, hopefully out of the anonymous archer's range. Even if things were going in their favour, the rest of this battle was going to be long and deeply uncomfortable.
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Posted on: Sep 2 2012, 01:19 PM


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"Oh, right," Tangle said. "I guess I forgot to mention it." She genuinely had -- somewhere between the tumble down the hill, the argument earlier and the ensuing stony silence during the climb, it had slipped her mind that her 'friend' here had no idea about their target's current medical state. "Jarl wasn't quite dead when I came downstairs. Me and him have a bit of history -- that's why I knew to take him out fast. Vicious bastard, him. Jarl got run through, but I guess he got ahold of Banehallow's arm. Lucky for him it wasn't his neck. Although that would have saved some people a lot of trouble."

She shrugged. "He's out a spear, though, and I'd be surprised if that wyvern rider weren't banged up herself by now, so we might have the advantage if we can catch up." She slapped Jinada on the back with false comradery, "So, let's get going before you pass out and I have to drag you, alright?"
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Posted on: Sep 1 2012, 08:15 AM


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Thankfully not too much worse for wear, the group quickly dragged the bodies over into the bushes alongside the road, and continued on their way. Constance was reasonably certain that they weren't about to be late, but she didn't want to leave that to chance, so their pace was notably brisker than it normally would have been.

As they walked, the vast army camp drew into view, sprawling outside the village it stood beside. It was impressive, and would have been a little humbling if Constance hadn't been at war before and seen armies at least as large. Still, it would have been very easy to be distracted enough by the sight to miss the slight, red-haired woman standing by the side of the road, madly scribbling into a little notebook. With her spectacles and overall bookish demeanour, she resembled nothing so much as a clerk who had gotten lost on her way to finding her office desk. Aside from the flamboyantly coloured uniform and armour, of course.

She didn't quite look up at their approach, until she'd finished scrawling a line. Then she snapped the book firmly shut, put it firmly into a pocket, and regarded them with a vaguely displeased look. "I thought I'd made it clear that I expected you people to be here at least five minutes before schedule?" she said, lip curling in displeasure.

Constance was quick to snap a proper military solute. "You have, general-ma'am. You have my apologies -- I take full responsibility." Dammit. Well, hopefully that would be the only detail they got wrong. Quell sounded annoyed, but not suspicious. Connie tried not to let her eyes linger on the elaborately gilt crimsom book that hung at the Mage General's side in the manner that another soldier might carry a sword. So, that was the famous Rexflame tome, was it? If the stories were true, this woman could use that book to reduce the four of them to a pile of ashes, if they gave her half a chance.

With a sniff, Quell returned the salute with a resentful one of her own, walked purposefully around them, and started off in a direction that abandoned the road entirely, heading for a little path that seemed to wind its way into nearby farmland. "Your superior officer will be hearing of this, sergeant," she said. But kept quiet after that. Hurrying to keep up with the small woman's brisk pace, Connie suppressed the urge to grin. So far, things were more or less going according to plan. Now it was just a matter of waiting until they were farther away from camp, and it would be time for the hard part.
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Posted on: Aug 26 2012, 08:10 PM


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"Assuming you're even up to the task of climbing this hill," Tangle muttered. But she relented. He was right, on at least one count -- using up all of her energy on arguing with him wouldn't do her any good at all. So, they made the rest of the trip in relative silence. As they neared the top, though, something caught Tangle's attention: A sound she couldn't quite recognise.

It was a low, pitiful keening, weak and definitely not human. It sounded like an animal in pain, more than anything. She held up a hand, signalling for her unlikely companion to proceed with caution. She didn't want to say anything out loud, for fear of alerting whatever it was to their presence. She slowed her approach to a quieter pace. But they didn't have far to go. As they rounded a large boulder the path skirted, they came upon it:

A wyvern lay sprawled on the mountainside, a throwing spear buried deep in its chest. When it saw them, it let out a pitiful hiss, trying to bare its fangs at them threateningly. The truth was, though, it no longer had the energy to do anything much more than lay there and look grumpy. "With a broken arm!" she exclaimed, dropping her quiet air. "That man is one lucky shot." Her smile went down a few notches as she looked around a bit further. "Do you see what happened to the rider? I can't see her anywhere around here."
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Posted on: Aug 21 2012, 09:42 PM


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Tangle rolled her eyes. Perhaps egging the fool on wasn't the smartest thing in the world, but she had just about had it with him and his attitude. "If I would have fallen, why is it that you're the one who ended up singed on the floor without a sword? I know your type. Always going on about how you would have won if circumstances were ideal for you. Well, maybe you would have. But they weren't, so you didn't. Maybe if you could learn to be a bit adaptable, you would be able to cope with the element of surprise or a problem you can't just hack in two. You have no idea what I'm capable of, or what kind of power I have. All you're doing is trying to make yourself feel better about me getting the better of you earlier."

They were about halfway up the path now -- it wasn't that hard going, thankfully. She was still highly sceptical about them having any chances of getting to their location before the thug on the wyvern. And she didn't care how famously skilled or crafty this outlaw was -- fighting off a trained professional with one of your arms broken was an impressive feat with more than a bit of luck involved.
  Forum: Bern · Post Preview: #813957 · Replies: 32 · Views: 14,519

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Posted on: Aug 21 2012, 09:10 PM


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QUOTE(Aviv @ Aug 21 2012, 06:32 PM) *
Seeing as how Shia just announced his leave, looks like I'll just post this for a grade.

Fangs of the Two Faced
RP type: CRP
Status: Incomplete
Summary:
A bandit force with the name the "Black Fang" has risen in Bern, raiding several villages. One village has decided to take a stand and has sent out fliers requesting aide. Our cast comes together. Unexpectedly, a common goal and desire is shared by three of the mercenaries, who deem it upon themselves to remove this blasphemous force.

Cast:
Valsford - Lv.16 Partisan, Lances{B} - Aviv
Tara - Lv.10 Peg Knight, Swords{C} - Darth_Slaverus
Crowley - Lv.10 Mercenary, Swords{C} - Shiaherazade - Left
Valerie - Lv.8 Wyvern Rider, Axes{D} - Dark Strategist - Dropped

I don't see any viable supports unless the Grader deems otherwise.

Okay.
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Posted on: Aug 18 2012, 10:20 AM


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Tangle frowned in his direction. "My name is Tangle Roses," she said. "And I'll thank you not to make assumptions about my 'strength' before you've actually seen it." So far, he'd only seen her hit people in the back as matters of opportunity. Well, not even 'seen', really. Mostly just extrapolated that it had been her. Well, this mountain wasn't going to climb itself. Putting one foot in front of the other, she started going up the road again. This time, he newly acquired bruises and aches seemed like they would be making the movement a lot more memorable than it had previously been.

"All I did was try to send you to the top floor while he was really in the bottom," she continued. "You're the one who overreacted and started holding me at sword point in the first place, remember."
  Forum: Bern · Post Preview: #813913 · Replies: 32 · Views: 14,519

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Posted on: Aug 16 2012, 12:00 AM


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An arrow whizzed past Connie's head as she lit a tent selected at random on fire. With a loud curse, she urged her pegasus upward, and carelessly tossed her torch aside. Hopefully, it would land on another tent, but she wasn't overly concerned. Lighting tents on fire wasn't a lot of use if she ended up dead in the process. She spotted the archer in time to notice him be run down by a mounted knight. There was that problem dealt with.

Her hand was now free, so Connie opted to draw her sword. She gave the area a quick once over. All around was chaos. Confused Sacaens running every which way, being cut down by the raiders. Some not-so-confused Sacaens were fighting back. She spotted a pegasus on the ground with a leg through it's throat, a small form draped across the ground nearby, and felt a twist in her gut. They would be pretty lucky if it ended up being just one by the end of things. It was also exactly why she couldn't afford to hover still; she guided her pegasus to swoop up suddenly, hopefully throwing off the aim of any potential archers looking her way.

Down below, a bellowing ox charged past, its side badly burnt, rather unconcerned about who it trampled in its mad dash to escape the fire, and her attention turned to one of her knights on loan from the employer, apparently attempting to fight several armed Sacaens on his own. They were backing him into a corner. He was going to be pulled down and killed rather quickly.

"Do not stop moving!" she shouted, swooping down to hit one of the sword fighters across the shoulders with a lash of wind magic. "They outnumber us!" She had quite a bit of practise making her voice carry, but even so, she didn't know how many would hear her over the general din of battle. She had also lost track of Nerine, so watching out for the girl was out of the question.

It seemed like, without fail, Connie always knew how to pick the most dangerous jobs while not even trying.
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Posted on: Aug 15 2012, 09:02 PM


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And in a few brutal seconds, three of the four soldiers were down. The last man standing didn't waste any time; he didn't bother with last minute heroics, or losing his head at the horror of the situation. He turned on his heel, and ran as fast as he could in the opposite direction.

"Oh no you don't," Connie muttered, swinging her sword his way. The wind magic lashed him across the back of the leg, causing him to stumble and crash to thr ground. In a few quick strides, she was down on the road, and on top of him. She could see him reaching for his sword, but she was faster; she drove her blade down between his shoulder blades, ending him quickly. She quickly wiped a bit of blood off on his shirt.

"Right," she said, turning to the rest of the group. "Everyone not dead?" The question was mostly rhetorical. She could see that they were all alright from where she stood. "That went faster than it might've. We're ahead of schedule. Good -- now let's go see a fire witch."
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Posted on: Aug 15 2012, 04:25 PM


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With a groan, she pulled herself to her feet, leaning hard against the tree to keep her balance on the incline. Taking a moment to catch her breath and wait for the ache to recede in her side, Tangle looked back up to where Jinada stood, trying to muster as much dignity as she could manage before she climbed up to him. "I don't hear a lot of gratitude. If I hadn't warned you, you would have been brained there." She purposefully skirted the corpse of the unfortunate Jyn.

"We might both have come all this way for nothing, by the look of it," she said, crossing her arms as she looked pointedly at the mountain, where the form of the wyvern could be seen approaching the top. "Too far away for me to hit by now. I guess we'll have to hope he kills her, but she wounds him in the process." She shrugged. "Although I suspect our motives may diverge in this instance. I assume you're after his head?"
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Posted on: Aug 14 2012, 11:55 AM


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Wow, guys. I'm really sorry that this took so long to get graded, because this was actually a very nice thread, and you all put in good performances. (I ended up doing the thread for Bro, since he's busy). This is going to be light on cc, unfortunately, because there was just an all around positive demonstration of RPing from all parties involved.

Darius
- Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+0)
- Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
- Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
- Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
- Character's interactions were meaningful and interesting, allowed the reader to understand things about the character (+1)
- Participant exhibited teamwork and coordination with other participants (+1)
- Topic exceeded page 4 (+1)
7 points + 1 level thread runner bonus = 6 levels, 4/5 of a Sword level

I do quite like your thread running style. You did use the standard "meet in an inn" thing that has been done to death, but once again you kept things fresh by not actually having all the participants join in at that point -- it gave more of an opportunity for Darius and Eiiza to re-establish their rapport, and waiting a page to bring Kenth in made a lot more sense with his character. I was also genuinely impressed with the twist -- and pleased as always to see someone willing to use one of the characters from a country's Important NPCs topics in such a direct way. I did notice that you made the decision to depict all of the Etrurians who appeared "on screen" as being cartoonishly pompous/evil -- I was actually rolling my eyes at that monk at the end -- but it didn't detract from the thread too much.

Darius has this duality about him that's interesting. On one hand, he's this upright knight in shining armour type who doesn't like doing the wrong thing and believes in justice, but on the other if you make him angry enough, off he becomes this merciless, cold-blooded killer. I've seen it in other topics, and I liked it here. It adds a sort of scary side to the character and prevents him from being dull. It's also good when he ends up having to work with characters like Kenth and Eiiza, because he presents a very good foil for their more pragmatic methods.

Also, Resca x Keltrin OTP.

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- Character was well-portrayed and there was no need to refer to the profile or past roleplays for personality information (+1)
- Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
- Character actively participated in combat or problem solving and in a way suitable for their experience (+1)
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7 points = 3 levels, 3 fifths of a Knife level

I've seen Eiiza quite a bit by this point -- in threads I've participated in, ran, and graded -- and I've got to say that I felt like this was the place I liked her best. Between Darius's idealism and Kenth's harsher patriotism, it was nice to have someone involved that was just in it for the money. And better, everyone knew it. Her ditching the other characters a bit early was also pretty spot on -- having her stick with them beyond the point of profit would have felt a bit out of character, and it was a nice change of pace compared to how topics usually go. Threatening Keltrin's life to Resca at the end like that probably wasn't the smartest thing to do, of course, considering how paranoid she'd shown herself to be earlier -- but it did say a lot about the character and her priorities.

Kenth
- Posts were creative and ideas contributed to and developed the RP (+1)
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- Posts were structurally and grammatically sound with correct spelling (+1)
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- Participant exhibited teamwork and coordination with other participants (+1)
- Topic exceeded page 4 (+1)
7 points = 5 levels, 4 fifths of an Axe level

Kenth basically coming in to save the day was made cooler by the way you guys planned it out and set it up in advance. His interactions with Darius were great all through the thread -- the mutual dislike tempered by necessity really came through loud and clear. This topic also showed the character having some depth. Like how he was willing to capitalise on the accidental killing of all those civilians in his backstory, here he is perfectly willing to be known as the man who threatened a church full of unarmed healers, as long as it serves the rebellion's cause and doesn't get them actually killed. It really sets him apart from, say, Darius's more traditionally heroic patriotism. Strong characterisation in general.

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Bye, Shia. Good luck.
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Tangle wasn't listening. She didn't even bother picking up the pin. Instead, she leapt to the side in a hurry, hitting the ground and rolling down the hill until she came up hard against a tree. All hope that her outfit might be salvaged was immediately and painfully extinguished. On the plus side, she didn't get hacked down by the axe that scythed out of the sky. Neither, she noted blearily, did Jinada. He must have heeded her when she leapt aside, or otherwise sensed what was coming, because he leapt down out of the way seconds before the large, red wyvern.

The flying lizard, despite having missed both of its targets, didn't even bother trying to circle around for a second go. Apparently, its rider was quite intent on simply flying on to the peak. And now she noticed why. A new, small figure knelt on in the road in a crouch, where they had apparently landed after leaping from the wyvern. The figure stood, and drew out a long, wickedly curved knife in each hand.

"My sister flies ahead to claim the bounty," she said, her voice muffled by the silk scarf that covered the lower portion of her face. From her complexion and accent, she seemed Sacaen. "I remain behind to deal with the competition. On your feet, swordsman; with his face in the dirt is no fit way for a warrior to die."
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Tangle struggled not to roll her eyes. This man looked dangerous now, even if he was being ridiculous. "You can try, but I rather doubt you'd find it. I'm fairly good at hiding things. Killing me might be therapeutic, but then how will you ever get the sword back?" As she spoke, she backed up, trying to put a bit more distance between herself and the swordsman. A step or two might provide her with just enough time to get in a burst of fire before he cut her head off. One hand pointed sharply to the collar of her blouse, which was torn from where he'd ripped her pin out. "Personally, I thought of it as something of a trade; I liked this shirt, and I liked that pin. You ruined one and took the other, so I took something of yours. That's fair, isn't it? If you don't like being robbed, maybe you should stop tearing the jewellery off of women you hold at sword point."

Suddenly, her eyes widened as if she'd spotted something over Jinada's shoulder. "Look out!" she shouted, pointing and sounding entirely genuine.
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"I don't know -- it seems like you probably don't need me to explain how to make coloured fire." Tangle wasn't actually looking at Cirr; she had her hands on her hips, looking up at the night sky overhead. They couldn't honestly afford to stay there like that for too long; once the chaos in the mansion died down and it became clear that there wasn't a corpse in that study, they would be on the look out for the thief. And, if Tangle had any say in it, she would be a good way away by that point.

She shrugged, choosing to pretend not to hear the girl's intent to inflict violence on someone. It sounded rhetorical, at any rate. "I do have to thank you, though. You tagging along certainly made things more interesting -- I like having someone to talk to while doing this sort of thing. And I don't know how I would have managed with that silly box if you hadn't been there."
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It did occur to Tangle a moment or two into the run that perhaps instructing a one-armed person to cover her ears on such short notice wasn't entirely fair. Not much to be done about it by that point, though. The explosion had been through the door and everything, after all. It was unlikely that she would end up deaf now or anything. Nothing a visit to a healer who knew what was what about staff work couldn't fix.

"Pink? Easy. Just tell the spell to be a different colour; dead simple, especially for the easier spells. Can show you later if you want -- hard to be informational while running." she heaved in a breath as she finished the answer, almost as if giving a deliberate example. "Uh... this way, I think," Tangle said, following a half second's hesitation as a staircase appeared.

This would prove to be a common occurrence; she would make a similar declaration whenever multiple choices presented themselves. Whether it was a nervous tick, habitual talkativeness, or actual uncertainty was worryingly unclear. As they neared a particular door, it burst open ahead of them, admitting a frightened looking scullery maid, who thankfully didn't even spare them a second glance as she darted past.

"She probably won't recogognise us," Tangle said, slipping through the door the girl had just left open. Inside was a storage room -- a large pantry full of food that could withstand longterm storage, arrayed in bags and baskets on shelves reaching up to the ceiling. More importantly, though, on the far wall there was a servant's entrance. Grinning, Tangle rushed over as energetically as her tired legs could carry her, and tried the knob. It was very open, letting clear, cool night ear in from the outside. "After you," she said, holding the door open for her unlikely partner in crime.
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*Head tilt*

Oh. I remember you. From this topic. Which I was not in, but I did read when I first became active here. I note that you have posted a handful of times since then, (like, once about Friendship is Magic last year), but I can't really seem to shake the association.

Anyway, welcome back for however long you're here. And, looking at the forum as a whole, I have actually seen it deader than this. I mean, we actually have some sporadic FE-related discussion now.
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This was getting increasingly desperate. Tangle had strongly considered giving up and pawning off the valuable looking sword for a few gold to make all this worth her while. It certainly wouldn't do wonders for her reputation, though. And 'I got the better of a dim-witted swordsman but then gave up before I got the real prize' didn't have much of a ring to it, as far as bar-side bragging went.

He wasn't particularly difficult to track at this point. After quickly stashing the sword somewhere she'd be able to retrieve later, she'd been able to trace the broken-armed man's steps out of the city, and into the surrounding hills. The sun was low in the sky by this point, and Tangle was getting close to feeling the effects of fatigue. A lone, small mountain rose up before her. It was squat and humble compared to its larger cousins to the north, but still towered over the surrounding foothills.

Conspicuously, she could see a wisp of smoke wafting up from a cave mouth part-way up. Maybe her didn't care about being discrete at this point; a painful, untreated injury did that to a person. Well, maybe it would make him more likely to see reason. Instead of simply more likely to kill her on sight. As far as she knew, he hadn't seen or heard her at all while she was at the inn, so her target had no reason to believe she meant him harm. Other than plain common sense, of course.

With a sigh, she began to make her way up the rough, wearisome path that seemed to go to her destination. It was going to be quite dark before she was done here.
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